Peer Reviews

Peer Review 7

https://charleshowellsite.wordpress.com/2016/04/17/art-gallery-of-nsw-discussion/comment-page-1/#comment-7

Hi, Charles,

Your entry is very well written in terms of detail and eloquence but it’s quite short. I love the painting that you included and how you clearly explained the meaning behind it by identifying the symbolism in the painting. Your interpretation of the painting is very insightful and interesting. In order to extend this entry and establish more depth in it, I would write about at least one other painting so that you provide a longer analysis of various kinds of artworks. Also, whenever you talk about how an artwork or text gives insight, always state that it gives insight to the reader, viewer, or in this case, to you personally. Overall, keep up the good work!

 

Peer Review 6

https://prarthanakarmacharya.wordpress.com/2016/04/30/conventional/comment-page-1/#comment-4

Hey, Prathana,

Just want to start off by saying that this is a great entry. You’ve shown a good understanding of the poem, The Measure. I agree with you on the point you made about ANZAC day. I also like the picture you’ve included, as it enhances your entry. In order to improve this entry, I would expand a bit more on the previous points you were trying to make, and just remember to put capital letters when needed, for instance when you started a new sentence saying “there” in the first paragraph.

 

Peer Review 5 

https://barbaraapicella1.wordpress.com/2016/04/23/a-fine-line/comment-page-1/#comment-11

Fantastic entry Barbara! Your introduction on the film, Suffragette, is very insightful. I also love how you’ve incorporated your own personal views on the matter of recognising the importance of feminism; this makes your entry really expressive and descriptive, which is great. I would just replace the word “his” to “her” as you are referring to Mary Gilmore in your last paragraph, so remember to proofread your work as much as you can.

 

Peer Review 4

https://carlosgomezbravo.wordpress.com/2016/04/13/kia-ora/comment-page-1/#comment-10

Nice entry Carlos! I agree that there is a much stronger sense of unity between the Maori people and the New Zealanders of European descent. This is because of the treaty the two communities established when the Europeans first arrived in New Zealand; The Europeans also found the Maori culture to be very civilised and similar to theirs. I like the unifying features in the painting that you included in your entry as it incorporates both western and indigenous styles of painting. Just remember to proofread your entries as much as you can. I would also suggest replacing the word “demonstrative” with “apparent” and structuring the sentence in a different way so it makes more sense.

 

Peer Review 3 

https://paulnguyen1.wordpress.com/2016/03/24/week-3-connection/comment-page-1/#comment-1

Hi, Paul!

I just want to start off by saying that your blog entry is very descriptive, which is good. I totally agree with the point that you are trying to make about the importance of connecting to nature, and how Indigenous Australians have a metaphysical connection to Australian land, in contrast with the European settlers. Also, it’s great that you’ve included how the study of Australian literature has personally impacted you.

As I am peer reviewing your blog entry, not your peer review, I notice that you’ve put your peer review in the same post as your blog entry when you’re actually meant to separate them into different posts and categories. Furthermore, remember to use capital letters when needed in your blog entry, such as “I believe” instead of “i believe” or “i think”. I would also rephrase this sentence: “I think, although we generally acknowledge our environment as good and healthy, we don’t go beyond this acknowledgement, and do not truly appreciate how picturesque a simple line of trees or bushes can be” and say something like: “Some people don’t look into nature as deeply compared to Indigenous Australians; I think we need to become more appreciative of nature and not overlook the beauty of a simple tree or bush.” Overall, keep up the good work!

 

Peer Review 2

https://annalieseferraro98.wordpress.com/2016/03/21/2-new-understandings-the-dreaming/comment-page-1/#comment-12

Hi Annaliese,

This is a great entry, as you start off with an engaging introduction and have analysed the insightful poem, Urbanised Reebocks. You’ve also provided your own discoveries of the many contrasting interpretations one can have about a poem because it is all about perspective and experiences that can shape our understanding of texts or art works. Although I would suggest proof reading some of the sentences you wrote, to check for any spelling and grammatical errors, such as this sentence, “when she proclaims “I lose myself amongst the spirit of life..”, I faintly recognized her attachment to land and but I realized without it, it drowns who she is out.” It’s actually spelt ‘recognised’ and ‘realised’ in Australia and Britain, which is different from the way Americans spell it. The use of “and but” doesn’t make sense, this seems to be a typo so I would just remove the ‘but I’ and say ‘and realised that etc’ instead. I would also change “it drowns who she is out” to “it drowns out who she is” or “her connection to the land is a part of who she is”. Overall, keep up the fantastic work!

 

Peer Review 1

https://serenasaliba.wordpress.com/2016/03/13/week-one/comment-page-1/#comment-2

Hi Serena,

I like your balance of personal expression and critical analysis of the texts we studied and your description of what you’ve learnt from these texts throughout your entry. In particular, your ideas about the appreciation of nature explored in the extract from Thomas L. Mitchell is very well written, as you discuss both contrasting views towards Aboriginal culture and their heritage in detail. You’ve also stated your own interest as a student in finding more literary works that highlight the utilitarians approach to the land and indigenous culture, which is also good. Overall, great first entry on the study of Australian literature!

 

 

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