https://jamievoblog.wordpress.com/2017/04/17/blog-5-lightning-flow/comment-page-1/#comment-30

Hi Jamie,

I really like how you’ve thoroughly explained why you liked this painting. I found that your ideas and interpretation of the painting was very interesting to read. However, it was quite hard to follow as there were several sentences that needed to be separated into different paragraphs. Also, “emphasized” is spelt “emphasised”. Other than that, keep up the good work!

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