Peer Review 8 https://anniewatson2.wordpress.com/2016/10/03/blog-six/comment-page-1/#comment-90

I really like this entry Annie! I like how you’ve added a bit of humour to your description of your grandma. You’ve definitely shown how you see the extraordinary within the ordinary in people. You provide a good balanced exploration of looking inwards and outwards of the person you are talking about, which is great. The only thing I would do to improve this entry is to remove the word, “Yeah” in the first sentence of your last paragraph so that it doesn’t sound too colloquial.

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