Peer Review 4 https://carlosgomezbravo.wordpress.com/2016/04/13/kia-ora/comment-page-1/#comment-10

Nice entry Carlos! I agree that there is a much stronger sense of unity between the Maori people and the New Zealanders of European descent. This is because of the treaty the two communities established when the Europeans first arrived in New Zealand; The Europeans also found the Maori culture to be very civilised and similar to theirs. I like the unifying features in the painting that you included in your entry as it incorporates both western and indigenous styles of painting. Just remember to proofread your entries as much as you can. I would also suggest replacing the word “demonstrative” with “apparent” and structuring the sentence in a different way so it makes more sense.

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